Very nice work! I think the blinds look fine

Very nice drawing.
I don't see a problem as to how the blinds turned out, but personally I'd give the hands a more realistic feeling, but that might be just me > I have a thing for hands

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You did step out of the comfort zone iwth this one its quite different to your usual ones. The darkness can be appealing, and I like all the little details of it. You still seak refuge in the outlines, but your line art is always spot on. I like the geometry of it it is well done, the blinds and light is perfect. Few things i would possible improve a bit on are eyes, give them a bit of life and detail, as well as a bit more volume to the figure. I am attributing a lot of problems to the bad scan since i know scans of pencil can be very tricky and difficult. I am glad to see you loosening up with the hair its more free than usual, it is the right way to go. Keep it up I always love when you improve and this is defenitely step in right direction (:

The perspective is nice and I'm amazed at your level of skill with pencils and shading [wish I could do that]. The only problem is with blinds [some slats look out of sync] and mebbe with the mouth [it makes her look rather alien-like or fish-like even].

BUT, it's cool you're aiming to improve! GO FOR IT!!!

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Heyy, not bad. Yeah, the thing with the slats on the blind, they look quite cartoonish in the way they're shaded compared to the figure. The figure is pretty good, only thing I casn really fault is the lips as they seem a little too puckery and stand out against the rest of the face. On a more positive note, you've done good with the contrasts between light and dark.

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Hi Clav,

I think it looks great! I found it quite pleasing to the eye as I waited for the image to load.
Hmmm... I certainly like the dark bit; the use of contrasting tones is very dynamic and dramatic. So overall, I think it looks lovely, it's just the blinds, like you say. Across the face it's quite acceptable, but across the torso the shadows appear overly linear and graphic. It's just something to keep in mind next time - approach strong shadows as darkness over form.
Someone mentioned outlining... well, since you were working hard on shadows and light, that's why I think this drawing is particularly successful. I really like the back of the right (rather away) hand; the form is shown by shading rather line (although you still used lines). Your strong use of line is more evident in the other hand, and very much in the blinds. If you're attempting at photorealism, it'd be nice to see you trying to do that some more, show form through shade (chiaroscuro) rather than through sharp, crisp outlines, which don't exist in the natural world.

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i agree with everything said above, about the hands and mouth, etc. (the hands have an outline, thats the problem) but i would also like to point out that her stomach has almost no shading at all. its odd once you notice it.

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Thanks

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Yeah the hands were slightly fustrating because of the light shining on it on one part then the darkness covering it. I'll be sure to keep my eye on hands again later on

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